Is this any good and would you be interested?

It's really good. I usually don't read these questions all the way through cause most peoples' frustrate me, lol. But I read this one all the way through! :) Just this one sentence confused me: ‘let’s race each other home.’ I asked Emily. If she's asking, shouldn't there be a question mark? That's just the only thing I found :). Also, I'm guessing this is sorta in the past? Correct me if I'm wrong? :) Good story.